So looks like the Executive Summary and the Mission/Vision Statement need some serious work. Please see the note below;
Executive section the whole section has an issue … Has no place in an Executive Summary – bottom line should be upfront. You can repurpose this material in the rest of the KM section. Secondly, in the last para … starting from “This paper provides an in-depth overview” to the end of that para …. Outline of paper should be at start of paper, bottom of the introduction or preceding a passage, also has no place in an Executive Summary – keep the first sentence: This paper provides … engages in” then summarize the main findings succinctly and any recommendations you provide
Mission statement = who we are
Vision statement = who we want to be
Condense both sections into one and don’t sell the company as if you were part of their PR team. Instead, adopt a critical mindset – all you are saying is that Apple complies with ecological regulations in countries where they operate (a legal requirement anyway). Tip: use the espoused v. enacted theory framework to thoroughly assess org behavior at this level. Also, lookup “Foxconn suicides” something worth bearing in mind while discussing supplier excellence – I’m not making a normative statement here just that it would have to be addressed if you want to expand their espoused behavior…
See the line … “HP Inc. derives its strength from the many years it has been in operation, dating back to 1939” so the comment here is … So does IBM but that doesn’t really mean much in the tech space – if you’re making a point about organizational structure reword accordingly
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On page 8 first para all the way to the end of the para it starts with “Apple’s company mission statement shows that Apple emphasizes electronic devices as administrative outputs.” for this para the comment is …. The point to drive home here is that Apple is in the business of selling services using hardware as a vehicle for delivery. It could be made more salient in this section.
On page 8 the following…. At the same time, Apple has leveraged it on software and incorporated it within the hardware, making its merchandise more valued for customers. Therefore, an iPhone without its App Store will not be as valuable, regardless of its beauty.
The observation here is ….. Again, Apple is only involved with the tiniest portion of applications powering the iPhone – there is a whole ecosystem of application developers that needs to be addressed
Starting on Page 14 to the end of the first para on page 15 … the comment is … “This entire section is out of place. I was expecting an expansion of KM – you made a lot of claims in the beginning of this section, you have to back them up and not hijack attention with another section”
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